ransom

I've been writing my 225 script religiously, so religiously that I now have three drafts and I have digressed so far from my original idea I wonder if I'm doing this just to please the guy marking it. I mean, though he might say, we as screenplay writers are allowed to at any point say "Screw you I think this will work" despite whatever others say, it is a lot more tricky when the person who asks you to change it in such a manner is the same person who will determine your grade.

That's the point I am feeling rather sore about now. I am a musical person so my initial idea was something light, sweet, romantic, and well musical. Though we should aim to make a classical narrative (for this one, at least) is it so important that we must dramatize everything to the point that every script must end in extreme emotional distress? Mine has a twist at the end, but somehow the feedback I am getting seems to be "NO FUCK, SHE'S NOT ANGRY ENOUGH, DAMNNIT. MAKE HER WANT TO STRANGLE HIM! MAKE HER WANT TO CHOP OFF HIS D***, THEN AT THE END MAKE HER CRY AND THREATEN SUICIDE BEFORE he finally springs the surprise."

Seriously, believable, realistic? In an Asian context I find this hard to believe since most Asians I believe, are not as outspoken as to cry breakup so quickly especially in a long-term relationship. I mean, maybe Caucasians are so open, maybe we SHOULD be so outspoken to clear up any doubts, but is it so hard to expect a different dimension, a different sort of reaction from someone in the same situation? Does the whole world have to flare up over small little incidents to the point that we must take things to the brink of emotional meltdown before we are happy?

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